Bob the farmer was riding his bike to see his friends to drop off a basket of apples and pumpkins. He was going so fast that he got the wobbles and crashed into the hay bale. He then flew into the bale head first and was stuck. He cried out for help but no one could hear him. His hands were stuck in his pocket scared to dear life. The poor farmer thought it was the end of his life when he felt the hay bale get loose he felt hope. He finally got out by the help of one of his friends. It turns out someone did hear him.
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