Thursday, September 10, 2020

100WC - Week #1 - Mia Hyde

 I woke up with a shock, the boat had stopped moving! This was supposed to be a lovely holiday on a cruise ship. But no, the boat has stopped moving.  I climbed out of my bed and looked at the time, 3:30am!!! I heard the loudspeakers crackle on, and then the captain started speaking. “Sorry the boat has stopped moving this early in the morning! We are trying to fix it!” 

1 hour later…

“We have fixed the boat, it should start to move now!”

Gradually, things started to move…”YAY!!! THE BOATS MOVING!!” Mum and Dad screamed happily.
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  1. AnonymousSeptember 10, 2020 at 2:38 PM

    Hello mia, I really liked how prescriptive your writing is. keep the good work up!

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