It was stormy and cold outside. I wanted to chase birds and hiss at dogs but the rain gradually kept going. I felt like I was dropping into a dark ocean but I was just quietly sitting there wondering if there would be an end to this rain. Just then I heard it… ¨SQUEAK¨ ¨What was that?!¨ I thought. ¨Could it be a mouse?¨ ¨It is!¨ I bolted towards the hole in the wall just then… I felt dizzy. I couldn't think right. Gradually, things started to move… I blacked out and when I woke up the mouse was gone.
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