There i was riding my bike in my big gum boots and farming clothes going to get some bread and
lollies
with some pumpkins and apples
in the wood box at the back of my bike and i was going past a
house there was a lady watering her plants
she said hi and waved i said hi
back and then this is the part that goes wrong i waved back and sed hey
have a good day and the i didn't see the big circle
of hay then i went flying in to it and i kind of got stuck in
the big circle of hay all of my pumpkins and apples had fallen onto the
ground there was silence
everything turned black then 90 years ago
i woke up and sed what hapend the nurses sed that i was in a
coma for 90 years!!! Oh my god i sed how old am i ???
the nurses sed umm well your...your...y...o...u...r…
im am wat i sed your umm 100!!! omg!!!!!!!!!!.
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