When I was going to bed that saturday night I sore a piece of a gigantic piece of steel it was moving gradually, things started to move very slow then fast I was scared. Then a couple of minutes later I was woken up by a tennis ball that smashed the window. My mum, dad, sisters, dogs, cats, ponies all woke up by it mum and dad came in with my sisters who were crying then mum said I will clean it up right away everyone stand back. Then she cleaned it up. Then one minute later it was usleep.
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