Monday, July 2, 2018

100wc#week38 Issy m

“Daddy the sun's in my eyes.” said molly. “Honey be quite.”Said molly dad. “NO you be Wow. look daddy it's a purple leopard.”Said Molly.
“Yes honey that's a Purple pride leopard.They are very rare.If you touch it you may be cursed forever.” said molly's dad.
“Ok time to go back to the campsite.”Said molly's dad.
“Ok.” siad molly
“But I want to stay and touch the big pretty purple cat.”Said molly.
“NO! Said molly's dad.
“Fine I'M not your best friend.”Said molly.
“I love you honey.Yes I love you.”said molly's dad. Issy m

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1 comment:

  1. AnonymousAugust 12, 2018 at 4:00 PM

    hi issy here I realy like how you have pruot the promnt into the story
    next time read your story out loud so you can see mistakes you have made
    issy d

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