Tuesday, February 4, 2020

100WC - Week #19 - William

Me, my brother and my parents were driving back into our hometown ‘Morrinsville’ from coming back from the airport after having a holiday in Australia. “Wow” everything has changed here since we were here last, Suddenly I heard a high pitched scream and then a low groan, “did anybody else hear that. Everyone nodded slowly. “Oh no we are going to die” Mum shrieked, I was looking out the window as we passed the local playground and I saw a small boy with a screwed up face and wrinkly pale green skin swinging on a swing   “zombie apocalypse” I screamed….

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  2. Hi William i enjoyed how you were driving back and saw a Zombie kid with green pale skin and he was swinging on a swing. From Jacob
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  3. William, I love the theme of the story. Zombie Apocalypse is a good theme. Its enjoyable. Make more writing like this, have it spread over the whole world. I really liked the way you described the zombie kid.

    Continue writing, they're really good.

    -From Kenneth.

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  6. William I like your story it really good I like the part were you saw a little boy on the swing that was really good how you described the little boys skin from Diesel

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  7. Hi William
    great work keep on trying!
    from Harry

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  8. To William,
    I love how you screamed “zombie apocalypse" that was cool I also like how your mum said that oh on were gonna die!

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