Wednesday, February 12, 2020
Chloe - 100 WC - Week #20
“Hi Bob” “Hi Joe are you ready for the concert tonight?” “not really Bob I need a chair” “don’t buy one I have a lots” “wait what is that? Joe I do not know is it a …..ummm ….a bee? no it is flying towards us….”.As it flew towards us I couldn’t see what it was. “Maybe it’s a fly? No, it is too big! Is it a flying monkey? No! lets get ready for the concert tonight. Ok im going to go to your place. Ok Joe. Hey it is sill flying at us….. Stop!…”
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Hi Chloe i like how bob and joe are in the story keep it up
ReplyDeleteHi Chloe.
ReplyDeleteGreat work keep on writing amazing storys!
From Harry.
To Chloe,
ReplyDeleteI liked how you used heps of full stops in your story and yes it might be a fly.
From Carla