Wednesday, February 12, 2020

100WC - week #20 - Carla

As dad woke me up I was like “why have you woken me up for.”  “We are going duck shooting’. I was like “ok lets go” When we got  to the pond dad said to me “have you seen a duck?” I don't know but as it flew towards us I couldn't see what it was dad was like oh really i was like yes the next minute I saw a duck I said yelled to dad “there is a duck.”” Got it” dad said to me. What do you think that thing  was, a  bird?

4 comments:

  1. hi Carla,I really like how you expressed your feeling about waking up. why did you go duck shooting? what was the bird.? Keep up the good work!-Xaveika

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  2. Hi Carla i like the Duck shooting Story maybe next time don't yell duck because i think you might of scared The duck away.From Jacob

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  3. Hi Carla,
    I think your story is awesome.
    I especially liked the first half.
    I also like the part where your Dad woke you up.
    Keep writing!
    From,
    Madi

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  4. Hi Carla,
    What a mysterious story! Congratulations on your writing this week.
    Thanks for sharing!

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