Monday, February 24, 2020
100WC - Week #22 - Phoenix
We went back to my old house the door handle was smashed in. We were scared but I heard something in there, it sounded like crying. I pulled the handle, it it was gg my little brother he's big now but where is my friend? But then he’s not my brother he start to laugh and he shoot now bang bang bang we are safe for now but he’s not going to stop so we shoot again and again and again we finally killed him. Hooray we did it...
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To Phoenix,
ReplyDeleteI liked your story especially the start.
Remember your speech marks.
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