Thursday, February 20, 2020
100WC #21 Bailee
Roar!!! Roars a lion “That was loud” shouts my sister “yeah' shouts my Nan loudly.' 'Lion ''yelled my cousin. Right now we’re looking at the giraffes at Hamilton zoo and even though we are about a km away from the lions we can still hear them.” a giraffe” yells my cousin , she is wearing a pink dress.”AHHHHHHHHHHHHHH” sang my other cousin as if to say don't forget about me ( and trust me it was painful ). My other cousin was wearing a purple dress which somehow had managed to get all dusty we weren't there for long. Isn't she trouble
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