Monday, February 10, 2020

100wc-week #20 -Ella


As it flew towards us i couldn't see what it was i was scared, happy ,sad ,amazed,coo,l hot and cold .I have so many emotions i don't know what to feel, was it a spaceship? An alien? Umm i don't know ! There it goes again, but this time it has red and blue stripes and it is yellow!  i am getting so scared and happy at the same time. Now there's three in a row.... now five .....o my gosh i might faint .....no i am good for now but i  need to sneeze....ah ah choo....yuck.

5 comments:

  1. Hi Ella,
    great job i liked the end bit.Keep up the great work!
    From harry.

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  2. Thank you Harry for the nice comment i have commented on your writing i will keep my great work! up

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  3. hi Ella,I really liked the part where you expressed your feelings in the story. why did you have to sneeze? Keep up the good work!-Xaveika

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  4. Hi xaveika i dont know why i had to sneeze and thank you

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  5. I really liked your writing it was really cool and I liked how you said umm from Carla

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