Thursday, February 20, 2020

100WC - Week #21 - Kenneth

The past tense was unbearable. I was running out of breath until I found a dusty room. I lay on the ground hoping not to be noticed, I held my breath for so long. I almost turned pink. It was painful.  “Here come’s the Bad Man,” Sang the black figure running in the distance. I got out of my little hiding place and explored the zoo. There was a giraffe, I thought hiding in their enclosure would be a good spot. Until I noticed the... droppings. So smelly and disgusting, It was like I was in a legit garbage dump...

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