Humph! playing in the backyard with my friend I look up and see something flying in the air going around and around, going REALLY fast! I try to see what it is but it is going too fast. As i'm looking trying to figure what it is I watched it go around and as it flew towards us i couldn’t see what it was…..a bird uhh a PLANE?! a bird but what sort of bird could it be? my friend says it’s “a RAINBOW BIRD!” no ? “what is it ?”says my friend I say well it could be umm.
Monday, February 10, 2020
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Hi Harry I really like your writing because your friend was saying rainbow bird. From Joe
ReplyDeleteHi Harry i really liked Reading your writing. And would like to see more. Have you tried using I really liked your creativity.
ReplyDeleteContinue Writing good story's like this i really enjoyed it.
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hi Harry I really enjoyed reading you story keep it up i cant wait to read more of your story's is your story based on what you have read? and have you thought of using paragraphs? from Ella
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