“Mum! Whats wrong with Dusty?” I ask. Dusty is our dog, we are going to take him to the zoo today. “I don't know! Whats she doing?Is she sick?” Mum asked, “ Dusty looks very painful!” I say. “ Oh well! Time to go to the zoo!” Mum yelled.
When we were at the zoo the first thing we saw was a giraffe, the giraffe sneezed all over dusty! And it was pink snot! Before you knew it, our dog had disappeared! “NO!!” I yell sadly, “I want to go home!!!” I sang. “OK then, get in the car” Mum said.
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