Tuesday, February 4, 2020

100WC- Week #19 - Jacob

Ahhhhh everyone yells. The plane is on Flames. We need to land. But we cant the water is right there we are in the middle of nowhere we need to land on the water then place the inflatable raft  then light a flare ok let's do that OK coming in for landing Boooofffff!!! Ok i'm going to do the door you get every out safely and grab the flare and light ok sure hmmm Nobody can see it although it was saturday no one was at town to see!!!

3 comments:

  1. Hi Jacob I liked the way you described the way the plane went down with onomatopoeia's
    and then you used the flare to signal for help
    What inspired you to use this idea?.
    From William

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  2. Hey great story but did you mean the plane was in flames the plane was on fire.What got me to read your story was how the plane was in flames if you can please write more story's like this and I want to ask you if you can keep writing story like this.

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  3. hi Jacob I really enjoyed reading your writing because when everyone screams AHHHHHHH! that was funny. from Joe

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