Thursday, February 13, 2020
100WC - Week #20 - Phoenix
Me and my friend were walking down the street. My friend saw something in the sky. as it flew towards us we couldn’t see what it was. so we started shooting it .But it’s eyes were red and feathers were Blue and the feet were green and it had sharp teeth. it came back its mouth was open it is a a a zombie bird we thought it was the end but it was really nice I don't zombies talk i said to the zombie bird they don't talk said the zombie bird how are you talk us zombie birds can talk to people…
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Hi Phoenix
ReplyDeleteI really like your story. I like how much color the bird has. Did you end up killing the bird?. I like the cliffhanger. Maybe next time think about adding more full stops.Overall a great story.
From Milah