One day me and my friends went to a cliff that you can jump off with water at the bottom of it. It is really big. So as I looked over the edge I saw a lot of water so I went back home to get my friends. I said to them "Come, come with me, I saw a cliff with water at the bottom, it is really cool." So when we got there I was like "Let's go and jump off the cliff." First I jumped, then my friend jumped and then we went and climbed back up.
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