Sunday, April 28, 2019

100WC - Week #28 - Abby


Far away in a jungle out of sight,
are some creatures that would give you a fright.
Like giant wasps with bat like wings,
and are stuck to each other by black sap streams.
The trees twist and turn then fall to the ground,
a fire starts and burnt them all round.
A pig hunter comes to see what had happened,
but goes back home without a pig and his lantern.
I suggest not to go but don't listen to me,
I bet you'll be gone in a 1 2 3.


1 comment:

  1. There was a lot of detail in this piece. I would never look at it like this. I liked the poem like format.
    From, Mohammad

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