Me and my friends ate a banana. It was black and heavy and it was a trick it was a zombie. We ran we grabbed a shotgun and we did little damage and we all blew the zombies head off but there were more and we had little ammo. We ran to a gun shop that the whole back room was filled up to the top top top. When we were fighting we ran out of ammo so we ran into 100 shops.
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