Stepping into the haunted house I get a deep shiver straight down my spine.as I take another step I hear a really creepy voice say “be careful what you wish for” you couldn't tell the age from the voice but you could definitely tell It was a woman. All of a sudden I hear my little sister scream and realized that I wished she died yesterday night. I ran through the dark hallways and see a dark figure as I stand there I realized that I was to late she was dead!
Wednesday, October 23, 2019
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