Ya today I get to do my diving test. Mum! Have you got the keys we need to take me now. I am not taking you your dad is. WHAT WHY? I WANT YOU TO TAKE ME! Just go with it. Find dad let's go. Yup let's go in the car. When we were in the car it was silent. HI my name is Ed so who will be driving today? Me. we get in the car I start diving my dad start telling me what to do. stop it dad. But it didn't. Then when Ed was looking away my dad started to? BANG! we crashed. I'm trying to hold on, he shouted.
Thursday, March 12, 2020
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Hi Emily,
ReplyDeleteWell done on completing the challenge this week. Don't forget to use speech marks when your characters are speaking, as it makes it easier for your reader.
Your story has an air of mystery about it. I wonder what will happen. I hope everyone in the car was safe.
Ms Brennock
Team 100 w/c
Dublin
Ireland