Swoosh Shshsh! on one mystical night a young girl named kamilla sailed through the wondrous ocean searching for a castle that was hidden on an island far far away daylight came as she sailed quietly across the turquoise water she heard a shuffle it was a cat hiding in her bag when she found the cat she patted it then it fell off the boat but after that she heard another rustling sound russssshhhhh nothing was to be seen as she turned around ….
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