A man was lurking around my house while I was in bed, he had a black hoodie with black clothes and black gloves and he was after my flat screen TV, he opened the door and tiptoed in and I had heard him before I even saw him then I got out of bed and I grabbed my phone and called the police then i sneaked in front of him and hid, I was going to do a sneak attack, he came through the door and I leaped at him and got him on the ground and held him there, then the police came and arrested him, I was a hero and I saved my TV.
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