Thursday, July 25, 2019

100WC # 4 special prompt Ruby


oh no ! my banana milkshake  wait what a best fruit talent show “the banana said”
I shall attend  that and I will win ,my talent will be keeping healthy and good looking. So the weeks past until he found this formula it said “trying to keep your body healthy and good looking try this out you’ll be dazzling “ the banana was so amazed that he didn’t realize he found that from the bottom of the dumpster that was slipping out the bottom when he was heading home he found it in the store  under the cereals where the protein powder used to be 
This banana was burglar and he was very good at sneaking things out like that so he stole the powder and when he got home he put it in some water and drank it 3 weeks later he noticed some type of purple hairy show up on his skin oh no the banana said the talent show is tomorrow  on the pamphlet it said anyone who disobeys there talent will get thrown into a volcano and swimming in there for 1 minute if he survives he will be put back in the contest  so the next day he just didn’t show up.

1 comment:

  1. Hi Ruby
    What a lot of exciting things happened in your 100WC. You have some wonderful ideas. Think about adding some punctuation next time you write. It makes is much easier for the reader to understand your story.
    Mrs P, Team 100WC
    Wellington, New Zealand

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