One day a family was camping and they left in the morning. They found this cave and went in it and then they saw a family of bears, then a bear woke up and started chasing them out of the cave the family was frightened. They couldn't believe there eyes. Then they gathered sticks for their fire, they lit up the fire and then it went everywhere and they had to call the fire station. Then they set up their tent and went to sleep.
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