Wednesday, July 31, 2019

100WC - July 19 (5) - Lachlan P

In Australia there was a man who was trying to touch the moon and one day he touched the moon it was the best day of his life. it changed his life to be up at the moon living his life up there and this man is great the man has a pretty life and it all aways will be and `sun goes down and the moon comes up this man will ride his motorbike over the moon.

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