Thursday, May 17, 2018

100WC #31 by Charlee

The Deer Of Flower Forest
Once upon a time there lived a forgotten land, named Flower Forest, there lived a single deer. This deers name was Dern. Dern was a flower deer, he had rose’s of every colour growing on his antlers and was a soft light brown. One  day when Dern was walking through the forest a small snowy white bunny hopped up to him and said “ I am trying to get to the snowy mountains, but I have lost my way could you help me?” 
“Sure but” he said  “Can I come with you?” 
“Yes that would be good” she answered

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