I was walking through the misty driveway when I heard a noise saying meet me at the graveyard, 4-00 in the morning, from Chuckie the Horror. He was waiting for me we stood face to face and then I spotted ……...zombies coming out of a He said they are my friends I hope you don't mind. Well I think run, go go get in! At that moment I notice that the zombies were on the car. I said drive and we were at Chuckies house he offered me a cookie. My heart was racing ……….like a car ………… “the zombies, the zombies.”
Thursday, May 10, 2018
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I enjoyed reading this because it was a zombie story. To improve your story try add more description
ReplyDeleteI thing it hocked you in, and you keep them there. Just r ember to give an idea of the sourding
ReplyDeleteI really liked how you added the horror movie Chuckie with a zombie scenario. Think about adding more description.
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