Monday, June 25, 2018

100wc #37 Marissa

It was my birthday and it had been raining all morning and mum and dad had forgot my birthday.And my birthday was on a school day so i got ready for school and mum and dad told me they were having a family dinner for my sister because she got in to the poem Finals it is  weird my mum and dad FORGOT MY BIRTHDAY.

3 HOUR LATER…..

Ring  the bell rings YEAH I  get to go to my sister ‘fake birthday’ still i think it's so weird that they FORGOT MY BIRTHDAY that weird  haley is picking me up.

1 comment:

  1. Hi Marissa
    great job on your story I like how you ended it like that was weird hayley is picking me up
    from Ava

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