Thursday, June 28, 2018

100wc week #37 Abbie

It had been raining all morning and it still had not stopped the paddocks were flooded with all the cows at the top.The cows were all huddled together  in 1 big big mob  with all the grass at the top  turned into mud. The lambs and sheep were altogether in the shed as they shoved them selves in.Now there was thunder and lightning too. Loud roaring noises shook the ground and thick thick clouds that narley touched the ground.So I´m just glad I´m inside now.
 By Abbie

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