One day me and my mum were walking down by the beach. It was a lovely day. "Oh my gosh look over there at the pod of dolphins" I said. A little girl heard me so she sprinted into the water. However, she couldn’t believe what she had done. She had run into the water but she didn't know that sharks swim with dolphins. Her mum yelled out to her but the little girl could not hear her.
My Mum said to go and get her. "No way, I’m not dying for her" I said.
"Go now."
"Fine"
by Ava
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