Thursday, June 7, 2018
Notch week #34
My family and i were going to the airport, it took us about 5 long long long hours of riding a car to the airport. After that 5 long long hours of driving i feel like i was going to puke of tiredness from 10 briges. In the airport people who work here sprinkled pink daffodil´s which were fake pink daffoil´s. We buyed some food and i got a huge hot choc and i saw a humanges airplane i ever saw actully it was a hele which it said apachi and the apachi is the fastest hele ever. It was just a dream.
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Good job notch i liked how you ended it
ReplyDeleteHi Notch. I do feel for you having such a long drive to the airport and your excitement about seeing an Apache helicopter, but I think that as a year 6 you could find a better way to end your story? Instead of .. 'It was just a dream', perhaps you could have said .... 'I was super excited about seeing it.' (the Apache.) What do you think?
ReplyDeleteJackie (Team 100WC)
New Plymouth