Tuesday, June 12, 2018
This story by Mitchell #35
This story is about one girl that conjured the sea heaven earth and fire. This story is also about a grave mistake which people were trying to find which could end the world. As we know it's not you and your world is but a prawn to ours. So reader, whatever your name is, so if you don't mind let's get started. In my world we talk English, did you hear me? She was fighting a dragon. Killed the dragon and the dragon turned out to be her father. However, she couldn't believe what she had done. She woke up….
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nice worke mitchill
ReplyDeleteHi Mitchel
ReplyDeletegreat work I liked how you started the story like this story is about a girl that conjured the sea heaven earth and fire.
by Ava
wow Mitchell that story really bow my mind
ReplyDeleteI really like the intro because of how you
introduced your story ¨a girl who conjured the word¨
Next time try on work on punctuation but overall very good