Tuesday, February 11, 2020

100WC-Week 20-Ayden

As I was driving a plane in the sky when I came to land as it flew towards us I couldn’t see what it was . When it came closer I found out it was a giant  radioactive eagle and about to crash into its nest with her eggs . The eagle started shooting eggs at the plane I jumped out of the plane with a parashoot the bird  started chasing after me so I pulled out my tranquilizer I started to aim pow there the bullet went hit . man no It was a  dream in my head I really wish that was true .

2 comments:

  1. Hi Aiden
    Great work with your writing!
    From harry

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  2. Hi Ayden nice Job on your keep it up! From Joe

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