Monday, February 24, 2020

100WC - Week #22 - Phoenix

We went back to my old house the door handle was smashed in.  We were scared  but I heard something in there, it sounded like crying.  I pulled the  handle, it it was gg my little brother he's big now but where is my friend?  But then he’s not my brother he start to laugh and he shoot now bang bang bang we are safe for now but he’s not going to stop so we shoot again and again and again we finally killed him.  Hooray we did it...
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  1. AnonymousFebruary 26, 2020 at 12:16 PM

    To Phoenix,
    I liked your story especially the start.
    Remember your speech marks.
    From Madison

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