Thursday, February 27, 2020

100WC- #22- William

It was Halloween and I was going to a haunted house with my family before we go trick or treating.
As we arrived I could see the haunted house from the carpark and straight away  I knew it was going to be scary.
We walked towards it and Jack exclaimed “ woah this is going to be awesome”.
“ Yeah, it looks pretty scary” Mum replied.
As soon as we walked in to the house We got greeted by and person it a vampire costume
"Good evening and welcome to our Haunted house followed through that door and then ‘try' to escape..."
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  1. UnknownMarch 1, 2020 at 5:34 AM

    Hi William,
    I really liked the idea about the Halloween and the haunted house. The beginning is very tense and unpredictable. However, next time try to use right punctuation in all the sentences.
    Best regards,
    Miss Milena

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  2. AnonymousMarch 5, 2020 at 10:50 AM

    I really liked your piece. The beginning is has a lot of suspense

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