One day I went hunting with my dad. Once we got there we went deep down into the woods. After that we came back out to the car and drove home. The next day... today was the day when Me and my dad went deeper and deeper into the woods. We were there in the middle of the woods! Bang! Bang! My dad shot to deer down wow I said he said nothing my dad said let’s go back to the car were lost I say oh well hey look there’s a house right over there...
Monday, February 24, 2020
100WC- WEEK 22 Aiden
THE MAGIC DOOR BELL!
One day I went hunting with my dad. Once we got there we went deep down into the woods. After that we came back out to the car and drove home. The next day... today was the day when Me and my dad went deeper and deeper into the woods. We were there in the middle of the woods! Bang! Bang! My dad shot to deer down wow I said he said nothing my dad said let’s go back to the car were lost I say oh well hey look there’s a house right over there...
One day I went hunting with my dad. Once we got there we went deep down into the woods. After that we came back out to the car and drove home. The next day... today was the day when Me and my dad went deeper and deeper into the woods. We were there in the middle of the woods! Bang! Bang! My dad shot to deer down wow I said he said nothing my dad said let’s go back to the car were lost I say oh well hey look there’s a house right over there...
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HI Aiden good work great twists and turns keep it up Addison
ReplyDeleteHi Aiden I like the way you said
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Keep writing they are really good
-William
I liked the story, I do think you could’ve had the dad say more, but it was still very good.
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