Thursday, October 18, 2018

100wc week #6 Rebecca

“Mum can I have a orange bath bomb of Jasmine’s” I asked as I danced around the room. “Yup”   I went up to the bathroom and grabbed one off the bath bombs and started to walk back down the stairs. As I almost reach the end of the stairs I clumsily fall down the last three stairs making a loud racket as Jasmine comes to the top of the stairs. She realises that it is her bath bomb.            “Oh no she's a fighter.”

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