Thursday, October 18, 2018
Nandani 100wc #6
The year was 3018, orange justice was long gone. Since orange justice got banned by the people of Fortnite no one actually got hurt anymore, no more hospital fee and no nothing. Why it got banned? Once a clumsily BB9 fighter was taking a tipsy-toey bath and he started to do Fortnite dances and there it was, he got injured. He had slipped. Owwww. The fighter had hurt himself on the backside.
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Hi Nandani
ReplyDeleteI really liked your story I thought it was very funny and I really enjoyed it next time maybe try highlighting the 5 words so we know what the words are.
Thanks Keira
Hello Nandani i think you did well in making fortnite bad. I think you could spread the words out better. Your friend Aden
ReplyDeleteHello Nandani i think you did well in making fortnite bad. I think you could spread the words out better. Your friend Aden
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