It was the day of the production, my face had looked fluffy from all the foundation I put on.
I walked down the concrete path, I arrived at school.
At 11:00 the busses showed up, We hopped on them.
When we arrived I saw all our props, the scooters , the red shoes.
Once it was our turn, we walked around the back, up the stairs and on the stage.
I stare into the crowd, I see my dad.
We had to line up, then we danced.
If I had to say, it was the best Wizard of Oz play.
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