Once I saw a scooter, it was a red one but something was strange. When I felt it. it was fluffy but then it ran away and danced on the concrete, but the concrete was slippery. Next minute I looked away because my Mum was saying “LUNCH IN TEN MUNITES” But when I looked back it was gone, so I sniffed the concrete. And the smell, smelt like mints, so I just followed the trail. There it was behind a rubbish bin, but the next minute it was gone, I quickly got my car and chased it. There we go.
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