There was a big fire inside my house and we were outside the house. But I had to see what was inside. All of my stuff was in there like my xbox and my computer, so I ran inside and thought of what I had in the house. Then I heard a big noise coming down the road. It was the fire truck! Then I said to myself I need to get out of here quick. When I came out of the house the fire was out. Then my Dad said what were you doing in the house?
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