“Hello”….
“Ummm thank you for your time,” Nick was quite nervous he'd been waiting for
this day ever since the end of graduation. People thought he was crazy but he
really did think he had made something that could change the way that you see
the world. “I came here to show something that could change the world,” he
reaches into his suitcase and pulls out a cup of water. They looked at it
squinting their eyes trying to find something small inside, and yes it looked
just like a glass of water but it isn't what you think it is...
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