Sunday, June 23, 2019
100WC - Week # - Caitlyn Kampenhout
Run says mum there is a fire I am running to the front door and looking back I remember that our cat is still I remember from the fire lesson that they will find a way out I hope he does I say in my head if he dies I will put some birds in his box with and hopefully he will com back to live the door is right in front of me and I turn one more time thinking should I go back in or should I go well I went outside and I saw a cat with a bird and then look at it closely and remembered that on the inside is a toy and my cat had a bird it must have listened .
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This is a very interesting idea, a nice use of the prompt and you do a good job of creating a tense atmosphere. One thing to consider adding would be some punctuation, just to control the flow of the story.
ReplyDeleteKeep up the good work!