The SUN was shining. Dad and mum were out in the garden planting FLOWERS. I Peer out behind them, A bunny HOLE!.Cool!. Why not walk up to it and see what's in there!. A big spade is blocking my path. I KICK it out the way. “Woah” I whisper to myself.
“Come check this out!,It's so deep” I yell.
Mum and Dad come walking up. I spot a teeny weeny SIGN down the bottom.
Saying:“BEWARE FOR THE BUNNY GRABER-”
“OUCH”
Down and Down and Down i go.
RING RING, RING RIN-. My alarm clock goes off. Woah.
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