Tuesday, June 16, 2020

100WC - Week #38 - Milah

 Nets wrapping around all the wild animals trying to catch them. The elephant was so surprised that humans captured them.  He thought that humans were nice and just looked at the amazing sight of the animals. The other animals like Mr Zebra, and Mrs Lion were trying to terrorize the humans like they were terrorizing them… Then The Elephant delivered his speech. 

“Why are you relying to capture us, it is not okay. We wanna live happily out in the wild. Not where you crazy humans are trying to take us.”


The humans were speechless.
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  1. ZacJune 21, 2020 at 7:22 PM

    Hey Milah,
    What a great story!
    I really liked how you described how the humans felt once the elephant delivered his speech.
    Something you could improve is your description of maybe the elephants characteristics or how the other animals reacted to the speech.
    Come visit my story at https://zac567mps.edublogs.org/2020/06/20/demolition-derby-part-5/

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