I was on the mountain and then I saw it was a big tiger with big teeth and then it was going full speed and right into the biggest tree there was. The people were screaming out loud help me please and then I was running over to the people and then bang there were lots of water spraying out of the dam ha help said a voice it was too hard to get to the people because all the water was in the way oh no there is trees going to place to place because all the water is everywhere
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