Sunday, June 28, 2020

100WC - Week #40 - Madison

“Look at that! “ yelled my sister Lizzie.
“What?” I questioned.
And then I saw it...
There was a baby elephant and its mum walking through the street...
But hold on, we live in a small town not a jungle!
“Why is it here, we don’t live in a jungle?” I said.
“Maybe they're lost?” said Lizzie.
“Doubt it, but how did they get here, the jungle is miles away! “
I said.
“Maybe they’re here for a circus?” she said.
“You really think that they’re gonna do a circus in this little town! “ I said
sarcastically.
Then the elephants started to walk away...

2 comments:

  1. My goal for this week is -
    Organise related ideas into paragraphs. - New speaker new line but keep related text in the paragraph.

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  2. Hi Madison,
    I really enjoyed this story ~ Milah

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