Tuesday, June 30, 2020

100wc- week #40- Carla

Once me and my friend Mia were on a adventure  in the

Jungle. We were trying to find gold then ssssssssssssss

Sssssssssssss. What was that I whispered to Mia! “ I don't know said Mia  whispering back to me. 

Ohno “ what i said “ look behind you said Mia” ...and then I saw it … RUN!!! I said to Mia it's a snake. “ Ohno mia said '' I scared it away ” that was a close one mia said well alest it is gone know. Ok where were we Mia with the finding gold oh ok said mia we were going to the trees. 

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  1. AnonymousJune 30, 2020 at 2:42 PM

    Hi Carla,
    I really enjoyed you writing, it was very good.
    Good job,
    Madison

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  2. AnonymousJune 30, 2020 at 2:44 PM

    My goal is to
    Support my ideas with detail.
    From Carla

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